There once was a family of purebred French bulldogs. They were
very well off but they had never been challenged, and the mother and father began
to worry that her pups were going to turn out spoiled and rude. The father was
always out hunting for food for the family, so usually the mother was with
their three pups. It had been a long time since the pups had seen their father.
One day a dog who looked like their father began to walk towards their house,
however, it was actually a mutt. The pups saw him in the distance and ran to
greet him because they were overjoyed that their father had returned! They each
brought with them a present to welcome him home with. The first pup
brought his favorite toy with him, the second pup brought her favorite brush
with her, and the third pup brought with him the most delicious treat that he
had been saving to eat after they finished their chores. When they approached
the dog that looked like their father they began to realize that this dog was
not their father. Two of the pups began to run back into their house, but one
of the pups gave him the present and invited this dog into their home. The
other pups did the same for their sibling inspired them. The stranger dog was
very gracious for their kindness, as most people often turned the other way.
When they walked into their home, the mother was at first very concerned, but
then very pleased. She had seen the lesson and leadership that her pup had
taught the others and even herself. Soon after, the real father walked
into the home. He explained that he had met this other dog out hunting, and
that he would like to have him stay with them for a while. He was very pleased with
how his family had reacted and hoped that there would be more great lessons for
them to learn.
Bibliography: The Gospel of Mark, King James Translation
Image: French Bulldog shares gift
WOW! I thought that the mutt was going to attack them or something! What a noble act of kindness that puppy showed.
ReplyDeleteI really wonder what would have happened if the mutt turned out to be a deadly wolf. I think this story would be really interesting if it were expanded into a much more elaborate plot by making the wolf start out as cunning and friendly, but deep inside he has deadly motives. The wolf would enter the home, and the mother would be worried, maybe one of the pups is always suspicious of them. The wolf keeps his composure for a long time, gaining the trust of the family, until one night he sneaks over to kill the mother. But as he attacks her and tried to kill her, the pup that was always suspicious runs over and saves her!
Noble acts of kindness are beautiful and show a lot of character, but it is also important to be careful about just how friendly you are being! This alternative story would be a reminder to be careful around strangers :)
Hello Stephanie,
ReplyDeleteYour story is so adorable, especially at the moment when the three pups thought the mutt was their father and runs out to give him their presents! I was thinking what if adding dialogues to your story will help readers learn more about the personalities of each characters, but after reading, I think dialogues aren't needed. Your storytelling style is smooth and is already easy to read. Great job!
Hey Stephanie, your story is amazing. I love how you made the characters into puppies. It was a really great rendition of the story.
ReplyDeleteHi Stephanie! Great story! The was very creative to work in puppies as the characters in the Gospel of Mark. I have not read the original story but I'm sure this story captures the theme of the story well. The parable sounds much more interesting and relatable from the perspective of the dogs!
ReplyDeleteHi Stephanie! I really enjoyed your retelling — I love the idea of making parables like this one more relatable for and interesting to kids (also this story combines two of my favorite things: dogs and the Gospel). One thing I was wondering is why the third puppy decided to share her treat with the stranger? What inspired her selflessness? But overall, I thought this was a fun way to retell this story, and the message was very clear.
ReplyDeleteHey Stephanie! I really enjoyed this story because I too have written a story involving dogs. I think they are perfect for characterization. I also like how you were able to provide a positive message with this story. I also think that the picture you chose was perfect for the story. From knowing the actual story I think you were totally creative and on point with your retelling of this story.
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